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Poetry~

Discussion in 'General Discussion' started by Frenemy, Dec 20, 2010.

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  1. Deadlychants

    Deadlychants Rainbow kittens Forum Legend

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    That's a very interesting poem, Regiix. O_O

    They say most poets use their life experiences to write their art, I sure hope this isn't the case.

    At any rate, it's a very well thought out poem, and it looks like you put a lot of work into it.
     
  2. regiix3

    regiix3 yeah Forum Legend

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    ahaha, tyty ^^
    and no, i havent experienced what i wrote out O__O well, maybe a tiny bit of it, but that isnt the case, and isnt important ^^
    anyways, i better hop off the comp before mum smashes the comp LOL.

    <3
     
  3. Jadet6

    Jadet6 Getting there

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    I really like your poems o.o that last one was really good and emotional. i felt like i could feel what you were thinking or feeling >.<


    Um here's mine; Criticism also welcomed

    Fragile

    Today is a revolution,
    Nothing seems to fit.
    Happily emotional,
    My waking flame is lit.

    Today is an emergency,
    Electro-shock my heart,
    Back to when we tripped,
    Rewind until we start.

    Today is an ocean.
    Fill my peaceful dreams.
    Wind is whistling, The sand is warm,
    Dive into the roaming streams.

    Today is a new beginning,
    My heart-beat timed to your voice,
    Kiss my cheeks and twirl my hair,
    My smile gave into your choice.

    Today is a new me.
    No longer small and frail.
    You stole my heart and filled my soul,
    You are my end less tale.

    (board wouln't let me put ******* as a full word) o_O ******* = end less
     
  4. konichi

    konichi Century Old Artifact

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    Well this is my Assignment in my subject "Poetry and Drama". We were asked to write a poem 10-15 lines about issues in our community so here it goes:

    [FONT=&quot]The Beggar[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Alms a cry they never see,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Oh Dear hunger has succumb me,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]A straying cat in a bleak street;[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Living in a nest without a tree,

    [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Man of means who’s money unknown,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Is a dog better than me?[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Deluxe supply of a Pedigree,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]While I enjoys food that was thrown.

    [/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]As the darkness swallows the sun,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]I’m back to my home a lonely one,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]Feeling the cold isn’t fun,[/FONT]
    [FONT=&quot]For my flame has long been gone. [/FONT]
     
  5. Deadlychants

    Deadlychants Rainbow kittens Forum Legend

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    Wow, Jadet. It's like you were born to do this. Excellent choice of words, and amazing transitioning. I love it.


    Edit: ****ing nice, Konichi. I really enjoyed that one.
     
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  6. regiix3

    regiix3 yeah Forum Legend

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    yahh, the stupid filter doesnt let you type in end'less without the apostrophe. ;(

    <3 Poem
     
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    chin haters be hatin'

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    thats heart breaking :(
     
  8. Taruka

    Taruka Well-Known Member

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    I personaly love this cute poem ^^

    Mary had a little lamb,
    Little lamb, little lamb,
    Mary had a little lamb,
    Its fleece was white as snow

    And everywhere that Mary went,
    Mary went, Mary went,
    Everywhere that Mary went
    The lamb was sure to go

    It followed her to school one day
    School one day, school one day
    It followed her to school one day
    Which was against the rules.

    It made the children laugh and play,
    Laugh and play, laugh and play,
    It made the children laugh and play
    To see a lamb at school

    And so the teacher turned it out,
    Turned it out, turned it out,
    And so the teacher turned it out,
    But still it lingered near

    And waited patiently about,
    Patiently about, patiently about,
    And waited patiently about
    Till Mary did appear
     
  9. Jadet6

    Jadet6 Getting there

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    Your poem is very beautiful =] (couldnt copy the poem because it wouldnt like... hard to explain D= )
     
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    Jadet6 Getting there

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    Thank you ^^
     
  11. Frenemy

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    To Love You Like This

    You'll always be the girl that fulfills my soul
    like a restless sea, like a calm sea
    always so distant like the horizon
    I scream your name silently in my lips
    the only thing that remains is the echo of my realization
    I'm still here in my dream that's about keep loving you

    It will be as you wish but that's how it will be
    if I have to wait for you for another seven lives
    I will hold on to this feeling

    Because I love you like this
    this is my fortune, this is my punishment
    May it be that so much love is prohibited?
    and I'm still here yearning to be with you
    to love you like this
    so near to your mouth without being able to kiss it
    so near to your skin without touching it
    Burning with desire with every look
    to love you like this, to love you like this

    To love you like this I'm walking in this slack wire
    running after your footprint that turned into shadow
    I'm a prisoner of the love you denied me that day
    I count the seconds until I see you again
    I make you the culprit of my own luck
    I even daydream about making you mine




    ~Raik
     
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    Frenemy Banned

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    Sweet words are easy to say,
    Sweet things are easy to buy,
    But sweet people like you
    are difficult to find...

    Life ends when you
    stop dreaming...
    Hope ends when you
    stop believing...
    Love ends when you
    stop caring...

    Forgive the heart that
    hurts you...
    And don't hurt the heart
    that loves you...

    Don't cry over anyone
    who won't cry over you!~~

     
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  13. Lucent

    Lucent Ghost in the shell of a former Drama Queen Forum Legend

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    Poetry?
    oh noetry! :3
     
  14. TheIron

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    Its a very good one :D
     
  15. snic

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    reminded me of deep purple song lol... nice one i liked it ^.^
     
  16. snic

    snic Respected Member

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    this is so amazing omg T.T <3
     
  17. regiix3

    regiix3 yeah Forum Legend

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    Its been 4 months, i dearly miss this thread <3

    She took that metal racket
    That ugly spark in her eye
    And on the couch sits that faggot.
    Just sitting there watching us fight.

    She screamed and she yelled
    Higher pitched as she screamed
    I wish she'd just go to hell
    She and that son of a btch

    She double-slapped my thigh
    Then whacked it once more
    Already i started to cry
    Wondering what was this for

    I lifted my hands
    to block the next attacks.
    It was there, the blood ran
    On the hand that mum whacked.

    Overboard did she?
    She hit me with a racket
    Id run away free
    Away from her bad habit.

    Hell, it still hurts
    My deeply sliced cuts
    and Mums horrible choice of words
    Forced me to lose all trust

    This was indeed 2 nights ago experience.
    That fight was interesting, was able to contain a large number of unknown components of poetry that i failed to include in this poem,
    I guess i made this a shortened version of what really happened :>
     
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  18. Ashtar

    Ashtar Enraged Ashtarius Forum Legend

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    Ah regi *tight hug*
     
  19. snic

    snic Respected Member

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    Sweet words are easy to say,
    Sweet things are easy to buy,
    But sweet people like you
    are difficult to find...

    Life ends when you
    stop dreaming...
    Hope ends when you
    stop believing...
    Love ends when you
    stop caring...

    Forgive the heart that
    hurts you...
    And don't hurt the heart
    that loves you...

    Don't cry over anyone
    who won't cry over you!


    i actually kept this one :D liked it very much lol :D (its by raik as well dont get confused :D )
     
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    Hmmmm, let's see if I can make up something in 30 seconds:

    I'm waiting for an update
    Which will solve one bug,
    But thirty other will be here
    Carl... you get no hug.
    T_T
     
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